100 Word Song: Counting Stars

It was a familiar feeling, being so close to everything he’d prayed for; not that he was a religious man, unless you counted hopes muttered to lady luck in back alley halls.

“A spade and we’ll be counting stars baby.” he breathed, nervously twisting the ring on his left hand.

He eyed his rival’s calm countenance and a surge of panic shot through him, foretelling an outcome he’d seen far too many times.

The dealer flipped the final card, singing in the river, “Two of diamonds.”

He watched the very last of their savings being raked in across the table.


This 100 word story was written for the song prompt One Republic’s “Counting Stars”.  Check out the rest of the challenge participants at:  My Blog Can Beat Up Your Blog.

Stay positive & love your life!



Listening to: Marcy Playground – Shapeshifter

Eating:  Salad

Drinking:  H2O

Random fact:  I’m a decent card player.  I made regular trips with friends to Biloxi when I was in grad school.  Crazy 4 poker and pai gow were my games of choice.


12 thoughts on “100 Word Song: Counting Stars

  1. Excellent writing. I’m so glad I found you. Based on your “Who is QuickStepp” I can tell we’re gonna get along just fine, fellow dog and beer lover! 🙂

  2. tightly written

    I like the snappy dialogue and that killer last line. Elmore Leonard would’ve dug this, hard.

  3. Yes! What Lance said. Like the picture you chose to go with the prompt. Nicely done!

  4. I used to work as a bartender in a casino. Sometimes the desperation of the patrons was tangible. People would spend hundreds of dollars hoping for that hit. It raises my blood pressure just thinking about it!

  5. You can feel the desperation in this piece. You painted a vivid scene in so few words.

  6. Can I just say that I very much like what you can do with words? You use them in a way that makes the words not chosen jealous, me thinks.

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